Discover Challenge: Opening Line

It was the first time, and
It wouldn’t be the last

For her eyes flickered up
Catching his breath fast

Steadily he observed, from
The quiet of his space
And true enough she did
Throw a look at him again

This time he mustered courage
Walked towards her, face aglow
But alas it was her station;  
Smiled a gaze, she turned to go.

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8 responses to “Discover Challenge: Opening Line

  1. aaawwww such disappointment! Poor him πŸ™‚

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  2. A J

    She could’ve left at the next stop! πŸ™‚

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  3. Short and bitter-sweet.

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